The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.

The provided graph illustrates information regarding employment in the UK from 1988 to 2012. Both timeframes saw a relatively steady percentage of full-time working men,

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the lowest share

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by part-time working men.

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in the latter timeframe. The total of UK's employees in the year of 1988 is 23,839 hundred. Just above half of it are men who work full-time. Meanwhile, every other type of labourer from both genders shared a proportion of below a third.

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, the number of employees rose to 29,600 hundred people by 2012. The proportion of full-time working males vaguely decreased to 47%.

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, ladies with full-time jobs and part-time working males got slightly higher

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percentages. Showing a relatively contradictive trend, the portion of females with part-time employment marginally declined.

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Jan 18, 2024

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Economic sectors
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Demographics
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Economic growth
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