The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The given bar graphs demonstrate the difference between habits of drinking and or buying tea and or
coffee
among
Australia
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Australian
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citizens’
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citizens
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of
five
cities
. As an
overall
trend, it can be seen that in all
five
cities
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cities,
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the lowest percentage of
people
have bought fresh
coffee
in the
last
four weeks. The chart clearly shows that
people
in all
five
cities
prefer buying instant
coffee
instead
of fresh
one
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ones
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. In a number of
cities
like Sydney and
Melbourne
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Melbourne,
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the difference is less than 5%,
however
, in
Brisban
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Brisban,
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it is slightly more than 15%. It is interesting to note that not only do the residents buy
coffee
,
they
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but they
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also
regularly visit cafés, and it is a trend in all
capital
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capitals
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except Adelaide. From the
data
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data,
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we can see that in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart almost the same percentage of
people
(around 60%) went to a café for tea or
coffee
and it is approximately 20% more than in Adelaide. It is obvious that the habits of the residents of various
cities
are pretty similar. In four out of
five
cities
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cities,
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people
would prefer going to a café
instead
of buying instant
coffee
,
whereas
buying fresh
coffee
is
at
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in
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the
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apply
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third place. Only in
Adelaide
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Adelaide,
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the results are slightly
various
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varied
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: the most popular trend there is buying instant
coffee
while
buying fresh
coffee
is still the least desirable option in all other
cities
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, five, cities, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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