The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make 

comparisons where relevant.
The above line chart demonstrates visitor numbers of the specific Caribbean
island
over 7 years from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the information contained millions (
M
) of people based on two accommodations, cruise ships, symbolized by
rectangle
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a rectangle
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and the
Island
, drawn by a triangle, and the total amount respectively. In general, the total number of tourists increased, except
on
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in
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2015, where stability was observed at 2.7M throughout the year until 2016.
Afterward
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, it rose again to 3.5M in the following year. Partially, cruise ship visitors
amount
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consistently increased except for 2012
that
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which
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was less than 0.5M.
And similar
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conditions occurred for
island
residents
on
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in
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2016 and
also
remained
on
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at
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almost the same level from 2010 to 2011.
Additionally
, to compare these pair of circumstances, people constantly
more
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prefer to
staying
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stay
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on
island
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the island
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but later, in the middle of 2015, the situation completely changed and
percent
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the percentage
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of people who want
stay
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to stay
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on cruise ships surpassed that of staying on the
island
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourists
  • Caribbean
  • Visit
  • Graph
  • Summarize
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak season
  • Anomalies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparisons
  • Sector
  • Significant
  • Patterns
  • Overview
  • Analyze
  • Data
  • Year-on-year
  • Percentage
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