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Lots of people are throwing away food, what are the reasons for this and how can food wastage is reduced?

#lots #people #food #wastage
Food
 wastage is one of the obvious
reason
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 for global
food
 shortage.
This
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delve
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 into the possible
resons
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reasons
 for
this
 issue and
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 forward some practical solutions. First and foremost,
the
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one of the obvious
reason
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reasons
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 for throwing
food
 away is the unusable balance
food
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of food
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 in
the
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restaurants.
In other words
,
the
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dining restaurants
one
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 of the major
source
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 of
food
 wastage. many a person would not completely eat their meals in the restaurants,
therefore
, the
blance
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balance
food
 will be wasted.
Moreover
, the
food
 production in the parties
are
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 often not
realestic
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realistic
.
For instance
,
a
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recent wedding party in Dubai, more than ten thousand
kilogram
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 of
food
 waste are produced.
As a result
,
this
 problem will cause
food
 wastage
wich
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which
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 will contribute to
the
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global hunger.
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structure
Consider structuring your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Your introduction should present the topic and your thesis statement. In the body, develop each reason for food wastage and solution in separate paragraphs. Conclude by summarizing your points and re-emphasizing the significance of the solutions.
cohesion
Make sure to use a variety of cohesive devices to link your ideas within and between sentences and paragraphs. Use words like 'however', 'additionally', 'for example', and 'as a result' to create logical connections.
development
Support main points with more detailed examples and explanations. Each reason for food wastage should be explored fully with specific examples or data, and each proposed solution should be explained as to how it will effectively reduce food waste.
task response
The task requires you to address both reasons for food waste and solutions to reduce it. You have started mentioning reasons but the solutions part is missing. Be sure to cover both aspects thoroughly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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