Nowadays many business meetings and trainings are happening online and not in real offices. Do you think, the advantages of this approach outweigh the disadvantages?

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of communication and tutoring
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changed from
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ancient times. Office conferences and coachings are held using
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the internet
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internet
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to save time and cost.
However
, its demerits are more as compared to merits which I will discuss in the following paragraphs. The first disadvantage is
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of interest. Employees may show less interest
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the
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business
meetings. If they are not supervised by employers they can scroll the browser for other websites by putting the meeting on mute.
For example
, during
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COVID-19
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the
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business
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businesses
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were having
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online using
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teams software and
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to show
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response
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inside
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meetings
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was less compared to personal ones.
Thus
, it will impact their learning behaviour.
Moreover
, on-site training leads to better
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to questions,
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and quizes
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quizes
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quizzes
and better relationships. If workers attend online tutorials they will not find
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answer
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of
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queries and participate in fun activities as they are doing
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inside
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offices. There will be
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of motivation.
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it is found that employees do not know who are their co-workers when they meet by apps.
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, they will enhance good relationships inside the offices.
Additionally
,if
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employers
employees
want to develop more motivation a location for coaching is
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must
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.
To sum up
,
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a place
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for
business
is necessary for all
business
meets
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meetings
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and tutoring they are arranging for workers. It will improve
relationships
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the relationships
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of
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employees and employers .
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