The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words
The table depicts
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Watt Hours (
TWh
) of world
electricity
production
from five different renewable energy
sources
over the four years between 2009 and 2012.
Overall
, the five energy resources have consistently increased with hydraulics becoming the largest
production
along
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the given period, followed by wind, biomass, geothermal, and solar respectively. As seen in the table, the most striking
of
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electricity
production
was hydraulic in 2012 which hit
the
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peak of 3,663.4
TWh
in total;
while
,
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Solar became the lowest energy
sources
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source
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with only 21
TWh
production
compared with the other
sources
during the period. In 2009, hydraulics led the
electricity
production
with 3,329
TWh
, Wind was
also
high with 276.4
TWh
which was merely 3% with Biomass,
while
the geothermal 67.4
TWh
and solar 21
TWh
at the rest.
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2010 until the end of the period, hydraulic was still in the top position followed by
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others like wind and solar became the most noticeable because
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electricity
production
sharply increased
more
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than 100% in order. Geothermal and biomass show
the
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steady increase, being left behind by the other
sources
, which only increased
1
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% and 20% respectively.
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