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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words
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The table depicts
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 Watt Hours (
TWh
) of world
electricity
production
 from five different renewable energy
sources
 over the four years between 2009 and 2012.
Overall
, the five energy resources have consistently increased with hydraulics becoming the largest
production
along
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 the given period, followed by wind, biomass, geothermal, and solar respectively. As seen in the table, the most striking
of
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electricity
production
 was hydraulic in 2012 which hit
the
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 peak of 3,663.4
TWh
 in total;
while
,
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 Solar became the lowest energy
sources
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source
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 with only 21
TWh
production
 compared with the other
sources
 during the period. In 2009, hydraulics led the
electricity
production
 with 3,329
TWh
, Wind was
also
 high with 276.4
TWh
 which was merely 3% with Biomass,
while
 the geothermal 67.4
TWh
 and solar 21
TWh
 at the rest.
In
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 2010 until the end of the period, hydraulic was still in the top position followed by
the
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others like wind and solar became the most noticeable because
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electricity
production
 sharply increased
more
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 than 100% in order. Geothermal and biomass show
the
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 steady increase, being left behind by the other
sources
, which only increased
1
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% and 20% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words twh, electricity, production, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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