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Some people say that in all levels of education, frm primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

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 too much
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on
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educational
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the educational
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 the
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 is true for theoretical
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. But
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the educational
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system
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 is not at all
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 on practical
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. I agree that
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the educational
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have
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 not considered
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practical
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studies
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 compared to theoretical
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. In my opinion, if
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 are taught theoretical
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 with no practice or practical knowledge there would not be an effective l;earning.
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, a practice or practical knowledge/
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 has to
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 a teaching or an educational
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,
a
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students
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 should learn theoretical
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 like mathematics
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while
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 the
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 should learn to use their mathematical or theoretical
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 to manage finance.
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 the
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 should get motivation from teachers. So it helps
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children
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to know the money value and their
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, Some people
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 need to learn practical
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. During educational years, the
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 have to focus on theories and factual
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,
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primary schools to colleges/universities have to teach factual
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 and
also
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 should have factual
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 in their educational
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Then
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 only they can learn theories
along with
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 practical classes.
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, the learning periods should give confidence to face mathematical
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 at any stage. Accounting management or managing finance companies has to cooperate with people to utilize the
skills
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 by learning/teaching maths in
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a theoretical
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 way
as well as
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practical
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a practical
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 way with more practice. In conclusion,
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although
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, parents,teachers and trainers are responsible for
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/
give
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 practical knowledge/facts to children. The government has to set goals to achieve good
level
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levels
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 by learning practical
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. In our education
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, both theoretical and practical
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 should be present by fact
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 as factual
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 with a life goal.

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