Some people believe that it is ok to put the needs of humans over environmental concerns. While others feel that protecting the environment should be priortized. Discuss both views.

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Environment
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human
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are one part of
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the ecosystem
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on
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, they are always living side by side. Some individuals believe that there is no problem if human needs can be put over environmental concerns,
while
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others argue that they should
priortize
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prioritise
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environment
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the environment
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. In
this
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essay, I will discuss both points of view and deliver some explanations. Exploitation
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the
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nature is one of
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the way
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way
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for
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humans
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to live a life.
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, it affects the
environment
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.
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, when
people
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mine
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gas or oil, it can cause the
polution
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pollution
of water quality, but if we do not take the gas and oil from
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the ocean
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bad
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, there is no energy which can be used for
people
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to do any
activites
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activities
activity
. The effect
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the
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nature can be
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overcome
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by
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because they can think
and
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about and
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reduce it by using
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technology. It can be inferred that individuals can take
everthing
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everything
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nature, but they have to
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about the impact
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the
environment
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,
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environment
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the environment
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has to be protected because not only
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humans
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who
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live on the earth
,
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but
also
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animals and plants as well. When
people
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do not protect the
enviroment
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environment
,
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, it will cause
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imbalancess
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imbalances
imbalance
which can lead to a disaster.
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, when
people
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do
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deforestation a lot
whithout
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without
any doubt, it will cause a
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or land
slizing
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sliding
sizing
.
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effect will make
human
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humans
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suffer.
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Environment
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The environment
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which is not to be paid attention from
people
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will affect many negative things. In conclusion, I believe that it is ok if
human
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humans
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put
they
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their
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need
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needs
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over
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the environmental
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environmental
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because they need to
be survived
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. Protecting
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environment
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the environment
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also
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important to stop
people
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from
suffer
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suffering
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because of
disaster
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disasters
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