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The table below gives information about the value (NZ$) of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012.

The table below gives information about the value (NZ$) of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012.
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The table illustrates the
amount
 of exports of
kiwi
fruit
 from New
Zealand
 to several countries in 2010, 2011, and 2012. In general, Japan, China, Mexico, Russia, and Saudi
Arabia
 were the countries that import
kiwi
fruit
 from New
Zealand
. The highest
amout
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amount
 of
export
 that New
Zealand
 did was in 2012 with the
amount
od
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of
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export
was
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being
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 $325,300,000 to Japan.
Furthermore
, the lowest
amount
 of
export
 happened in the same year with
total
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a total
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$
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of $
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82.000 to Saudi
Arabia
.
In every
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Every
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 year, New
Zealand
did
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apply
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the
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a
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 huge
kiwi
fruit
export
 to Japan with the number $271,100,000 in 2010, $287,400,000 in 2011, and $325,300,000 in 2012. The second country that has the top
amount
 of
kiwi
 fruits
export
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exported
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was
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is
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 China. The highest
amount
 happened in 2012 with the number $94,000,000.
In addition
, in 2010,
total
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the total
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kiwi
fruit
export
 from New
Zealand
 to Mexico was $6,000,000 and it became the highest
amount
 during the
export
 activity to Mexico. Meanwhile, Russia and Saudi
Arabia
 always
be
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been
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 the countries that have low value of exports. In 2010, the
amount
 of
kiwi
fruit
export
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exported
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 from New
Zealand
 to Russia was only $968,000.
In addition
, the total
amount
 of
kiwi
fruit
export
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exported
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 from New
Zealand
 to Saudia
Arabia
 became the lowest
amount
 in New
Zealand
export
 activity.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, kiwi, fruit, zealand, arabia, export with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 9 times.
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