The chart gives information abour migration to the UK. The chart shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intented to stay in the UK. And the pir chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

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The chart illustrates the duration of

immigrants

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in the years between 2000-2008 intended to stay in the United Kingdom. The second chart illustrates the reasons for

immigrants

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to stay in the United Kingdom in 2008.

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, most

immigrant

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immigrants

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favored

to stay

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in the UK for more than 2 years. The line chart shows a steady increase from 2000 until 2004,

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the number stayed constant until 2008 at around 250 people.

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, around 150 people chose to stay for more than 4 years, and the number remained placid from 2000 until 2008. Eclectic reasons were behind these

migration

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migrations

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to the United Kingdom. In 2008, the majority of

immigrants

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decided to

migrated

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to the UK solely to work.

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, just 6%

belows

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below

the immigrant worker,

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and 32

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% were students. Another 16% were

immigrants

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who wanted to be reunited with their family in the UK.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words immigrants with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

144 words

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The chart gives information abour migration to the UK. The chart shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intented to stay in the UK. And the pir chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

You are invited to a party, however, because of some reasons you didn’t attend. Write a letter to the friend who invites you: (1) explain the reason why you didn’t go; (2) express your apology; (3) ask about some details in the party.

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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the country side is decreasing.

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development s other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Children all over the world should learn to speak a single, universal language fluently in addition to their native language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?