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The chart gives information abour migration to the UK. The chart shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intented to stay in the UK. And the pir chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

The chart gives information abour migration to the UK. The chart shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intented to stay in the UK. And the pir chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.
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The chart illustrates the duration of
immigrants
 in the years between 2000-2008 intended to stay in the United Kingdom. The second chart illustrates the reasons for
immigrants
 to stay in the United Kingdom in 2008.
Overall
, most
immigrant
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immigrants
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 favored
to stay
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staying
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 in the UK for more than 2 years. The line chart shows a steady increase from 2000 until 2004,
then
 the number stayed constant until 2008 at around 250 people.
In contrast
, around 150 people chose to stay for more than 4 years, and the number remained placid from 2000 until 2008. Eclectic reasons were behind these
migration
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migrations
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 to the United Kingdom. In 2008, the majority of
immigrants
 decided to
migrated
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 to the UK solely to work.
In addition
, just 6%
belows
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below
 the immigrant worker,
32
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and 32
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% were students. Another 16% were
immigrants
 who wanted to be reunited with their family in the UK.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words immigrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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