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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate
power
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 plant production
sources
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 in two major categories, all types and renewables, in
Germany
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 and
France
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, in 2009.
Overall
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,
Germany
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's electricity relied mostly on conventional thermal
while
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France
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 depended on nuclear
power
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.
Moreover
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,
Germany
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's proportion of renewable
sources
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 usage was larger than
France
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's. To commence with, conventional thermal was the biggest proportion of electricity production at 59.6% in
Germany
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, but
France
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 used nuclear energy as their main source of
power
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 at 76%.
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, in
Germany
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, nuclear energy contributed 23%, yet, in
France
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, conventional thermal accounted for 10.3%. Regarding renewable
sources
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 application,
Germany
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 led the renewable
sources
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 consumption at 17.4%,
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,
France
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 only 13.4%. In detail, biomass was the major source of renewable energy in
Germany
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 at 39.3%. Meanwhile, in
France
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 hydroelectric was the largest contributor at 80.5%. Wind
power
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 contributed 36.9% in
Germany
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, only had a 10.5% proportion in
France
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.
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, geothermal was the only renewable source which had not yet been used in both countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, sources, germany, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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