The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The given maps illustrate how Stokeford was developed between
two
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the
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years
of
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1930 and 2010. There are some notable changes in the
map
by phasing out the shop, the gardens and the large house and establishing some residential
area
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areas
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, a retirement
center
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centre
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and access roads which did not exist in 1930. In terms of development, the road crossing the bridge which had not branched in 1930, developed and in 2010, three roads were built
newly
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apply
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.
Moreover
, primary school was extended to double the size of
previous
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the previous
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one.
Although
the post office
was remained
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remained
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unchanged, the shop situated to
north
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the north
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of that was removed in the
last
version of the
map
.
Besides
, both the gardens and the large house in the middle of the
map
transformed into retirement
home
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homes
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as well as
a street connecting
this
building to the main road and
also
some residential houses were constructed mainly around the new streets. Looking at the
sout
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south
part of the
map
indicates that farmland was eliminated in 2010, too. There is no considerable change in the
map
that could be mentioned.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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