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Band 2.5

The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates how the consumed and wasted
glass
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 bottles are recycled. The
process
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 consists of three stages which
beginning
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 with collection hubs and
then
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 processing and
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 with returning to factories and superkets. The
process
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 begins with the collection points
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 all materials that have been
throwed
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thrown
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 away are planned to be aggregated in a depot as the hub of recycling.
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, trucks loaded them to transport them into the
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that
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is
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 related to the second stage. After cleaning the wasted materials by using
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 water, they
devide
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divide
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to
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 three clusters in terms of their
colors
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 (brown, green and clear).
following
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this
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, the bottles undergo the
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 of
factory
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the factory
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 to be crushed as
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pieces of
glass
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. The
process
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 proceeds by melting the
glass
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 in the furnace, where the
glass
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 is heated to a temperature in the range of 600-800 degrees
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. The melted
glass
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 undergoes to be shaped based on the demands and
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finally
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 the new bottles are sent to the market or factories again.
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structure
You provided a general overview of the glass bottle recycling process, which is good. However, the essay lacks clear and distinct paragraphs for each stage of the process. Aim for clear paragraphing with each stage of the process discussed separately.
linking
Use a range of linking words and phrases to improve cohesion between stages of the process, such as 'subsequently', 'following this', or 'then'. Try to ensure a smooth flow from one stage to the next.
completeness
To fully complete the task, you should provide a summarization without missing any steps. Ensure that you mention all parts of the process as indicated in the diagram.
clarity
Work on providing clearer, more comprehensive descriptions of each part of the process. Use precise vocabulary specific to the process being described.
examples
You have not included any specific examples or data, which would help to support your description of the process. While this task does not necessarily require data, adding any specific examples or measures depicted in the diagram can be beneficial.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling bins
  • Glass bottles
  • Sorting
  • Contaminants
  • Crushing
  • Cullet
  • Furnace
  • Molten glass
  • Molding
  • Cooling
  • Quality control
  • Distributing
  • Reused
  • Recycled glass
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