The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives information about the amount in metric tons of local catches and imported fresh fish in Perth, Australia, between the
years
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2004 and 2014. In a ten-year
period
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it is possible to see that more fish were caught than imported and the most productive year was in 2008 with 81.36.2 metric tons of local fished seafood. Concerning Perth's fish purchase, it can be seen that the highest volume was acquired in 2012,
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to 1227.3 metric tons of fishing products.
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, 2005 had the lowest import rate of the
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years
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year
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,
amounted
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to 231.6. The figures
of
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for
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imported and local
fishes
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fish
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in 2007 achieved 6532.7, the biggest
overall
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in 10
years
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.
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, it is interesting to observe that
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activity presented a fluctuation through these 10
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,
although
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it increased in numbers
at the end
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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