The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced.

The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced.
The diagram shows
process
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the process
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of
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by
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which oranges
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oranges
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orange
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juice
is produced.
Overall
there are two
type
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types
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of process, the first one
are
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only
contain
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with
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3 major steps and the other one
have
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8 steps so it can
finally
distribute
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to
market
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the market
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. It begins with a truck that
brought
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brings
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fresh oranges,
then
they
transfered
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transfer
it
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them
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into
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to
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a factory and
cleaned
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them. After that, the machine
try
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to extract the oranges and the
ouputs
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outputs
become fresh
juice
and waste solid to feed the animal. In the first type of the process it
is
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apply
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only
continue
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continues
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into the
packanging
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packaging
and the juices are ready to sell.
It
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the additional steps, they picked out the fresh
juice
and brought
them
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it
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with
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the refigerator
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refigerator
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refrigerator
truck.
Then
, they need to evaporate them with
a
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an
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evaporation machine to
got
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get
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the concentrate of the
juice
.
Next,
it is
putted
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put
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them into a can and after that, they
transfered
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transfer
it
into
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to
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the warehouse. The
last
two
step
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steps
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before they send it into
shop
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the shop
a shop
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are to
brought
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bring
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them to the factory and
added
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add
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some water,
lastly
is
packanging
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packaging
so they
poured
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the
juice
into thin boxes. The final result can
finally
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be transfered
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transfered
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transferred
transformed
into the markets or shops.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words juice with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Orchard
  • Harvest
  • Processing facility
  • Quality control
  • Extraction
  • Pasteurization
  • Filtration
  • Preservatives
  • Fortification
  • Deaeration
  • Shelf life
  • Distribution
  • Bottling
  • Packaging
  • Labeling
  • Environmental impact
  • Sustainability
  • Waste management
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