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Prison is the only truly effective form of punishment, because it separates criminals from society. To what extent do you support this view?

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So important a notion for taking criminals to jail is a possible way to save citizens from them. Personally, I agree with
this
 view to some extent which I will elaborate
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. On the one hand, it is believed that prison is the
place
 which could give the offender a deterrent effect by reflecting
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 time. Because
,
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in
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the long sentence of imprisonment
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would make the criminals become
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kind
person
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 after finishing the punishment.
Furthermore
, Delivering rehabilitation for those who experienced prison sentences could
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a
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second chance to repair
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 personalities’.
In addition
,
this
place
 could provide security for people experiencing trust issues about crimes. If the crime victims have been traumatized and the perpetrators punished by related institutions, it would bring more peace and more equality or at least reduce anxiety for themselves after they know
this
.
On the other hand
, it would seem the villains who spend
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 only waiting for freedom
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 without
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 and improving
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personality
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 could make it hard for them when returning to the public.
Moreover
, Had prisoners rehabilitated rarely before coming back into
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society, they would be more aggressive and more violent with an opportunity to commit the same crime or bigger than before.
Thus
,
this
place
 would never change everything. Taking everything into account, I feel that isolation as a first-rate makes them feel guilty of
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. As long as
this
place
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counseling
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 activities for criminals
helping
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 themselves to survive when the detention period has been done.
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