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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.
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This
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 line chart depicts the
percentage
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 of the
workforce
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 in two different countries: the US and
Japan
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, from
March
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 1993 to
March
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 1999. It is clear from the graph that after
March
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 1998 the
workforce
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ratio
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 reached nearly 4.5 in both US and
Japan
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.
According to
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 what is shown, the US
workforce
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percentage
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 decreased gradually from 7 to 5.5 between 1993 and 1995. Regarding the US graph, it generally shows a decreased
ratio
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 throughout the period. It started from 7 and reached 5.5 during the first two years. After that, the
percentage
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 sustained at the same rate of about 5.5 before started decreasing gradually again until reaching its minimum value of nearly 4 by
March
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 1999.
On the other hand
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,
Japan
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 started from a modest value of about 2.3
ratio
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 with a remarkable increase during the first three years from 1993 to 1996. After 1996, it experienced a stagnation period at an average rate of about 3.3 before it started increasing substantially from 1998 to 1999 ending up at
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ratio
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.
To sum up
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, we could say that
while
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 the
workforce
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percentage
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 was increasing in
Japan
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 during the decade, it was on the other side decreasing in the US, until they met the same
ratio
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 of about 4.5 by
March
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 1999.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, workforce, japan, march, ratio with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Period
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Correlation
  • Economic policies
  • Technological advancements
  • Global economic conditions
  • Consumer spending
  • Social welfare
  • Public sentiment
  • Predictions
  • Economic strategies
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