The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart in 2005 shows the
number
of students who chose certain university
subjects
. The
number
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numbers
show examples
are different in every subject between
males
and
females
. In
this
bar chart the highest
number
of
males
just
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is just
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over 20
thousand
in
science
subjects
but the lowest
number
of just under 5
thousand
in
languages
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language
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subjects
. On the other side, the highest
number
of
females
just
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is just
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under 25
thousand
in the Social
Science
subjects
.
Also
the lowest
number
of just over 1
thousand
in Mathematics
subjects
. The statistics of
bar
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the bar
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chart
shows
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show
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males
did
best
Rephrase
better
show examples
and achieved
good
Correct word choice
better
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numbers in five
subjects
;
Science
, Mathematics, Humanities, literature and law than
females
in 2005. So,
females
did
best
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better
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than
males
in three
subjects
; Social
Science
, languages and Arts.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, subjects, males, females, thousand, science with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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