Fast food is part of life in many places. Some people think this has bed effects on lifestyle and diets. Do you agree or disagree?

Fast
food
has become more common
on
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a
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worldwide in
a
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recent years
while
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Some
individual
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believe
this
has negative effects on our way of life.I strongly agree
to
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this
opinion and think if we reduce junk
food
consumption
it will lead to quality
outcome
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.
To begin
with
i
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believe fast
food
gives
people
more satisfaction
within
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some problems.In these times Fast
food
is one of the most global
asset
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to
people
who are
being addictive
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and
obsessive
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with
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and in fact we are facing some
people
who can not live without fast
food
in life.
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example
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many teenagers already
became
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addicted to
the
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junk
food
and  many of them must consume
at
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least twice a week
while
when they go to school or university of course they need to eat something and they
prefer
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choose fast
food
because it is delicious and prepared quickly.
Nevertheless
There are some problems with health
issue
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and
i
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I
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think we should prevent excessive
consumption
and
it
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will not emerge any issues if we eat moderation ways.
Secondly
, reducing fast
food
consumption
guide
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way more extraordinary outcomes.
In other
words
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there are strong
relation
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between obesity and
diets
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diet
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.
People
who are embracing
with
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fast
food
,it appears one of the internal
obstacle
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included
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obesity.As we all know Many
individual
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individuals
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preferences
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prefer
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fast
food
than
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homemade
food
because at home They eat the same
food
and it turns out they
are
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tolerate
from
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the same foods.Another thing we need to avoid from fast
food
consumption
is that we need to fast now and
then
because it will bring meaningful and
usually
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things.One of the significant
fact
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facts
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about fast is our body removes harmful substances and after that in a couple of tries it forms
with
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useful substances. In
conclusion
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we have already accepted fast
food
like
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an asset and There is
not any
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no
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way to prohibit
hence
we have to inhibit excessive
consumption
and
instead
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we should eat in balance
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Heart disease
  • Diabetes
  • Sodium
  • Nutritional habits
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Addictive eating patterns
  • Socioeconomic disparities
  • Convenience
  • Affordable
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