The chart shows the percentage of males and females teachers in six types of educational settings in The UK in 2010

The chart shows the percentage of males and females teachers in six types of educational settings in The UK in 2010
The bar graph below gives information about the number of teachers in six
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of schools in 2010, grouped by
the
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gender.
Overall
, it is shown that as the stage of
school
become
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higher the number of women teaching is lower.
Firstly
, in the low grade
school
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schools
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such
as
pre-
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preschool
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school
, primary
school
, and secondary
school
, the teachers were dominated by
female
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females
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. In the first two education,
furthermore
, female
educator
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extremely outnumbered
its counterpart
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their counterparts
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, at almost ten times the male
teacher
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teachers
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.
While
for the secondary
school
,
eventhough
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even though
the difference between these two gender
group
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did
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not significant,
female
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females
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still stood for more than half of the teacher composition.
This
pattern did not apply
for
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college, where gender equality has been achieved in terms of the number of
teacher
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.
On the other hand
, more men were interested in
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a lecturer in the university or private training institute. For
the
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these two institutions,
men
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educator
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educators
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accounted for almost 60% and just under 80%, respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • educational settings
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • further education
  • higher education
  • adult education
  • specialist education
  • dominance
  • balanced ratio
  • non-traditional roles
  • trends
  • percentage
  • male teachers
  • female teachers
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • statistical data
  • demographics
  • workforce composition
  • gender disparities
  • graph interpretation
  • educational workforce
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