The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar chart compares the percentage of people who are divided into three categories based on the
coffee
and
tea
buying habits in
Sydney
,
Melbourne
,
Brisbane
, Adelaide, and
Hobart
.
Overall
, it can be seen that going to a café for
coffee
or
tea
was the most popular type of drinking
habits
Fix the agreement mistake
habit
show examples
among Australian people
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
while
buying fresh
coffee
was less popular. In terms of visiting a café for
coffee
or
tea
, citizens in
Hobart
and
Melbourne
had the highest proportion which was relatively equal at around 63%.
Sydney
had
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
second place when it
comes
Wrong verb form
came
show examples
to drinking
coffee
and
tea
in a café at about 60%, and after
that
Add a comma
that,
show examples
Brisbane
was in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
third status with almost 55%. In Adelaide, a little less than half of the residents went
café
Change preposition
to café
show examples
for
tea
or
coffee
which was the
least
Correct word choice
lowest
show examples
proportion for
this
trend. Regarding
to
Remove the preposition
apply
show examples
buying instant
coffee
, it was more preferable for individuals in
Hobart
at about 54% and it was less preferable in
Sydney
with
Change preposition
at
show examples
approximately 45%. Inhabitants in
other
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
three cities
include
Wrong verb form
including
show examples
Brisbane
, Adelian, and
Melbourne
drank instant
coffee
at 52%, 50%, and 48% respectively. Looking at the percentage of buying fresh
coffee
in
last
Correct article usage
the last
show examples
4 weeks
it is clear that
this
group wasn't the
preferences
Fix the agreement mistake
preference
show examples
in all these cities. In
Sydney
, people more enjoyed
this
kind of
coffee
in comparison with others at about 43%. After that, 42% and 36% percentage of
Melbourne
and
Hobart
's citizens purchase fresh
coffee
. The figures for
Brisbane
and Adelaide were equal with 34% which is the lower rate.
Submitted by kmibehnaz98 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, hobart, café with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • preference
  • beverage
  • caffeine
  • demographics
  • trend
  • survey
  • cultural significance
  • habit
  • seasonal variation
  • health consciousness
  • availability
  • implications
  • urban vs. rural consumption
  • data interpretation
  • quantitative analysis
  • fluctuations
  • patterns
  • peak times
  • economical impact
What to do next:
Look at other essays: