The diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and in future.
The diagrams compare the differences between the present
water
supply system in Australia, and what the system will look like in the future.
Overall
, the current plan
contains simple steps that involves
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involve
water
transportation, which is eventually detrimental for
the environment. Change preposition
to
On the other hand
, the system looks more complex and environmentally friendly in the future.
To begin
, the first plan
demonstrates the water
storage in a dam, moving to a city afterwards, where it is used in shops, factories, and households. Then
, while
the storm
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stormwater
water
goes straight to the river, the waste
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wastewater
water
is being
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trasported
to a Correct your spelling
transported
water
treatment plant first,
where it is processed.
Similarly
, the pure water
will be stored and then
send
to the facilities in the city, as Wrong verb form
sent
it is
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the
a
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the
plan
. However
, unlike now, both storm and waste
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wastewater
water
will be directed to a treatment plan
, where the water
will be filtered and returned to the city for reuse, avoiding the
river contamination.Correct article usage
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