You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concerts or or play classical music. Why? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more? You should write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, classical
music
become unpopular in several countries for young Use synonyms
people
, where it can be seen by just Use synonyms
few
of them attending Change the article
a few
the
classical Correct article usage
apply
music
Use synonyms
concert
or playing classical Fix the agreement mistake
concerts
music
. Use synonyms
This
issue can happen because the youngers are most attracted by other genres of Linking Words
music
, Use synonyms
for instance
, pop and rock styles and advanced technology makes Linking Words
this
Linking Words
changing be
faster. In my opinion, young Wrong verb form
change
people
should attend and learn more about classical Use synonyms
music
to prevent Use synonyms
this
inheritance and be their soft skill.
First of all, technology has broadly brought game-changing in human life including in terms of Linking Words
favorite
Change the spelling
favourite
music
each Use synonyms
years
. Change to a singular noun
year
In several
Change preposition
Several
decade
ago, classical Change to a plural noun
decades
music
was Use synonyms
be
all the rage, and many young Unnecessary verb
apply
people
at the moment tried to learn Use synonyms
this
musical type, Linking Words
while
in Linking Words
this
current day, the Linking Words
favorite
Change the spelling
favourite
music
has Use synonyms
transform
to pop- dance and soft-rock Wrong verb form
transformed
music
Use synonyms
as
the Change preposition
apply
favorite
for young. Change the spelling
favourite
As a result
, Linking Words
oldest
types become less interesting for them. Correct article usage
the oldest
On the other hand
, Linking Words
although
the musical classic Linking Words
not
very Add a missing verb
is not
attract
Replace the word
attractive
for
them, Change preposition
to
but
as an inherit, Remove the conjunction
apply
this
musical should Linking Words
thougt
at school to improve the ability of students since classical Wrong verb form
be taught
music
can increase Use synonyms
capability
of Add an article
the capability
Correct article usage
the human's
human's
brain.
According to researchers Change noun form
human
in
California University in 2022, Change preposition
at
people
who can be able to play several tools of classical Use synonyms
music
have Use synonyms
had
more neurons in their brain that can support the person to have more critical thinking rather than Unnecessary verb
apply
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
not
. Add a missing verb
do not
Furthermore
, the sound of Linking Words
this
Linking Words
music
leads Use synonyms
people
to Use synonyms
the
calm feeling. Correct article usage
a
In other words
, Linking Words
this
frequency of Linking Words
this
sound Linking Words
undirectly
reduces anxiety and stress over the ages. Rephrase
undoubtedly
This
will be a positive trend for youngers if they learn Linking Words
this
musical, as they are more likely Linking Words
have
many problems because of isolation which is coming from smartphone addiction.
In conclusion, young Fix the infinitive
to have
people
should learn classical Use synonyms
music
, not only to prevent Use synonyms
Linking Words
this
customs, but Correct determiner usage
these
also
to lead them Linking Words
reduce
their Add the particle
to reduce
stressful
. By learning Replace the word
stress
this
Linking Words
music
, young Use synonyms
people
can be more active and Use synonyms
dissappear
from smartphone addiction.Correct your spelling
disappear
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