The chart below shows how much energy is provided by four different sources in Italy, and the table below shows how much of this energy is used for four different household purposes.

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The chart illustrates the amount of

energy

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provided by

some

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different sources in a European country, and the table outlines

proportion

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the proportion

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this

energy

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consumed for four different household purposes.

Overall

it is clear that

non'renewable

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nonrenewable

non-renewable

and renewable

energy

is provided in Italy,

then

coal and Gas are much more than wind and

sola

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solar

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contrast

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the table depicts heating and appliance as twice many charging and lighting. Looking at the details non-renewable

energy

supplied about above 80%,

although

renewable

energy

supported approximately under 20

percent

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per cent

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. Next coal provided three times much more than solar. With

regarding

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the table, heating and appliances above 20 and

former

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once much more than

latter

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the latter

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consumed in Italy.

On the other

hand

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charging is the fewest

energy

household aimed and lighting almost once much more than charging. all in all appliances and heating are used a lot and charging is the smallest

energy

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consumption in a European country.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 3 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

158 words

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The chart below shows how much energy is provided by four different sources in Italy, and the table below shows how much of this energy is used for four different household purposes.

With growing number of populations in cities. Many people are living in small homes that don’t have outdoor spaces. Is this a positive or negative development?

Internet access helps young people and workers achieve their study and work goals more easily than before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones