The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales ( in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives
Correct your spelling
the
th e
annual Correct your spelling
the
amount
of rentals and sales
of films in
2002 until 2011 from a specific store
it shows the downtrend of film rentals in the specific store from 2002 until 2011. With Change preposition
from
identical
pattern, VHS which started Add an article
the identical
an identical
in
Change preposition
with
smaller
Add an article
a smaller
the smaller
amount
of sales
also
shows downtrend
and Correct article usage
a downtrend
then
disappeared after 2005, while
the
DVD Correct article usage
apply
sales
start
its momentum from 50,000 Wrong verb form
started
sales
in 2002 to reach
Wrong verb form
reaching
the
peak in 2007 with up to 210,000 Correct article usage
a
sales
per years
. But after it Fix the agreement mistake
year
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
it
peak in 2007, the DVD Change the pronoun
its
sales
slowly downcreasing until 2011. However
Blu-ray sales
emerging
in 2007 with only under 10,000 Wrong verb form
emerged
sales
per year until 2010, It steadily rising
until reaching 15,000 Wrong verb form
rose
sales
per year in 2011.
In summary, the annual amount
of DVD sales
were
dominant in all the years Change the verb form
was
although
it constantly drop
after 2007 Wrong verb form
dropped
while
blu-ray
Change the capitalization
Blu-ray
sales
appeared and it was the lowest amount
of sales
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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