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You recently attended a series of English lessons in a language school. However, you were unhappy with the teaching quality. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter: • explain why you chose to study English at the school • describe the problems you had with the lessons • suggest how the classes could be improved

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✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
I'm writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction
about
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problems
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that
is
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happen
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 every session in our
class
.I regret to say ,I'm quite disappointed
of
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 the quality you are offering .It seems
waste
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 of my time and my money . As I described to your interviewer,I intend to attend
to
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your
English
 course to improve my
English
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resource
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 and I like to be
well-inform
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informed
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 about new words and
slangs
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 in
English
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 language.
However
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 our teacher has
delay
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to join
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to
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the
class
 every session ,and
also
leave
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 the
class
 before time
end
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it
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up
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without any logical reason .He always assigns us to sort out
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the problems of the topic
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 with no explanation and no examples. I hope you
would
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 consider my feedback to tackle the problem.l do have some points which may be useful for the future. I suggest speaking with the teacher and asking him to be on time
,
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and be ready for the
up coming
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 topics at least a day before the
class
.If I wanted to study and solve my flaws in writing and speaking on my own ,it
was not need
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 to take part in your
English
class
. I look forward to hearing from you . Many thanks for giving me an opportunity to feedback and
also
 many thanks for your attention to
this
 subject in advance.
Your
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 faithfully Sina
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coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphing to organize your ideas effectively and improve the logical flow of the letter.
task achievement
Ensure that a polite and appropriate tone is maintained throughout the letter. Avoid overly informal language or expressions of frustration.
coherence cohesion
Expand on each idea with more detail, explanations, and examples while sticking to one idea per paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Include a proper greeting (e.g., 'Dear Director') and closing (e.g., 'Yours sincerely') to enhance the format of a formal letter.
task achievement
Ensure each problem mentioned is followed with a specific suggestion for improvement to fully complete the task response.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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