Some people believe that educational success depends on good teacher, while others believe that students’ attitudes are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is a view that good teachers can make educational success, but
on the other
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there is a view that student attitudes are important. There are arguments on both sides,
however
, which we will discuss here. On the one hand, it might be said that if
people
get
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good
teacher
that
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it
is
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give
the
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educational success.
People
usually
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taught by teachers when they study at school. Learning at schools has a curriculum that has been designed in
such
a way by experts to reach a certain target from a certain age group. The curriculum is designed for both technical and psychological subject matter. When someone gets a good
teacher
, especially in accordance with the curriculum that has been designed, the students being taught are expected to be able to grasp the lesson well and
can
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practice it in daily
life
.
Conversely
, student
life
is not only at school. Every second of human
life
is a lesson for now and
future
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. Learning starts from when
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a human
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is born until that person dies. From birth,
a
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babies
has learned
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about
life
based on what they
sees
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,
hears
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, and
feels
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from the
people
and environment around them. What you have learned will shape your way of thinking, how to solve problems, how to behave and so on. So
this
is
also
important in
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daily
life
.
Overall
, it seems that
,
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learning
together with
a good
teacher
will influence a person's skills or certain skills.
However
, a good attitude will
also
be very important to step, act and behave based on the learning that
received
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not only at school
,
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but anywhere.
Therefore
, a good
teacher
will provide good learning for students so that they gain certain skills and
this
also
needs to be balanced with a good attitude to be able to use the material given by the
teacher
wisely.
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