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An increasing number of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

#students #study #trend #benefit #countries
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it is known that the world has become small
while
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devalopment
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development
transportion
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transportation
. a lot of
besseness
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business
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men
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man
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men
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company
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companies
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 work
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globally
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global
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globally
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 and
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students
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student
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students
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 can go to another
country
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for
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complate
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complete
their
educatation
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education
. some person
believe
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 that it is so
dencer
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dense
about
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to
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lose
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losing
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 their valuable
students
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,
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others
 are not. ı going to
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explain
it's
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its
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advantage
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advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 in
this
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 essay. on the one hand, our
country
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 is so crowded and our economic
stuvetion
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situation
 can not let
to
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apply
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our
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apply
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every
student
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can
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go to
univercity
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university
. that's why some people
go
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going
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 to another school
of
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in
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 another
country
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 is
big
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a big
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as
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us
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.
addationaly
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additionally
, the learners can
get
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learn
defferint
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different
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cultures
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culture
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cultures
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 and
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languages
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language
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languages
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,
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and they
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they
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and they
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 can be
global
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the global
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 parson.
for example
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, even if Kemal Derviş is so
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an impornat
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impornat
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important
 economist in the world, it is thanks to
was be
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be
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student
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a student
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 of USE, even if he is from Turkey.
that
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exxample
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example
examples
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,
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apply
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 maybe he can not be
good
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a good
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ecunomist
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economist
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wold
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world
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 if he
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stady
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stays
 in
the
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Turkey.
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, our a lot of
student
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 go to another
country
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stady
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.
ofcourse
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of course
 it is not free and we lose
money
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 to
moch
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much
. because
student
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's
familey
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families
 charge big
money
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 for their
student
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. it
is
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means
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mein
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a lot of
money
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move
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anoher
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another
country
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. it is so bad
to
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for
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stuvatation
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substation
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insatance
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instance
, my
cousen
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cousin
charge
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charges
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dolars
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dollars
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stady
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in
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moreover
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, they do not come back to their
country
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 if the
students
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love
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 live
another
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in another
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country
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. for that
riason
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reason
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stady
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study
steady
abrode
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abroad
 is so
dencer
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dancer
dense
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citizens
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citizen
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citizens
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.
to sum up
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, we can work in the world, it
is
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will
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 make our rich
country
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.
however
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, if our
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student
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students
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 go
to abrode
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abroad
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stary
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study
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 we lose
money
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 and our valuable
students
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 who are smart. in my opinion, we
shuld
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should
 make
strong
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a strong
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 and free
educatation sistem
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education system
. that time
students
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 do not need go to
other
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another country
other countries
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country
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.
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