The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
The two pie charts illustrate
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about the result of
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survey
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done
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to
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the number of boys and
girls
who
particpated
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participated
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in cultural and leisure activities .
Overall
, it can be noticed that
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the majority
of men preferred computer games
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women preferred dancing. It is clear from the chat that , computer games had the
higest percentag
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highest percentage
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for 34 ./. .And basketball was the second popular activity done by boys . It was around 26./
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addation
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addition
, men
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not enjoy reading in
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their
free time only 2./. of them
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to read.
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, the famous activity done by
girls
was dancing about 27./. . women
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men they liked to read . it was about 21./. .
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is
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interesting
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that boys and
girls
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proportion
preparation
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to Music around 10%. For the
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activities done by
girls
like Netball and computer games accounted for 15./. and 16./. .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • cultural activities
  • leisure activities
  • participate
  • percentage
  • gender difference
  • similar participation rates
  • traditional gender roles
  • trends
  • impact
  • parental influence
  • extracurricular activities
  • accessible
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