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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999
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 graph presents the comparison of unemployment rates between two countries over six years.
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, those countries has an opposite trend which Japan increased gradually until reached 4,6%
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 US decreased moderately until 4,1 in 1999.
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 what is shown in Japan
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, the proportion of not working people constantly went up from 1997 to 1998.
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 it rose and got tangent to the US with 4,5% in half of 1998.
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, it reached its peak in 1999 with 4,6% people. On the other side, the percentage of unemployment went down 0,5% each year and the US
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 crosses with Japan's
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 rate in 1998.
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 it dropped to the lowest point in 4,1% in 1999.
To conclude
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, the trend between those countries were going opposite direction since March 1993 to 1999.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Period
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Correlation
  • Economic policies
  • Technological advancements
  • Global economic conditions
  • Consumer spending
  • Social welfare
  • Public sentiment
  • Predictions
  • Economic strategies
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