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The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart presents the
comparation
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comparison
 of
total
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the total
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 amount of fast food consumption in the United Kingdom over five years. The data reveals that fish and chips
is
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are
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 the most consumed among
other kind
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another kind
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 of foods.
According to
 the data, fish and chips
was
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were
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 not the most favorite at first.
Then
 the figure increased through the years and having its soared for getting 200
grams
 more
in
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from
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 1985 to 1990 which made it reaching its peak
in
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at
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 500
grams
 chosen by people in 1990. It was followed by Hamburger
who
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which
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 was the latest popular among those three in the beginning, yet, it went up gradually and
moving
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moved
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 significantly in 1985 until hit its highest point with almost 300
grams
consumption
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of consumption
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 in 1990,
causes
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causing
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 it
as
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to
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 second place after fish and chips.
Moreover
, in the third rank was pizza which was the most selected at the start as it shown was having 300
grams
 consumed in 1970, the highest among others.
Nevertheless
, it was clearly seen that
trend
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the trend
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was showing
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decreased slowly, seemed it lost
the
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interest in society, and reached its lowest point
1985
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in 1985
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.
Then
 it rose slightly in 1990 with approximately more than 200
grams
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fast food
  • UK
  • 1970
  • 1990
  • increase
  • stable
  • hover
  • peak
  • popularity
  • double
  • comparison
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