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You are unhappy about a plan to make your local airport bigger and increase the number of flights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter explain where you live describe the problem give reasons why you do not want this development Write at least 150 words.

#plan #airport #flights #newspaper #development
Dear Sir or Madam Hope you are well I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the article
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was
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puplished
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published
 in your newspaper
last
 week ,which
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was
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described about
expension
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expansion
extension
 of our local
airport
's
feild's
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field's
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planes
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plane
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planes
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 and
therefore
,
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the increase
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increase
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the increase
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 number of flights that will
transfer
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 caused by it. I
am
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have been
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 living
nearby
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near
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 the local
airport
 for almost five years.When
the
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airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 want
taking
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to take
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 off or
landing
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,they make too
much
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 noises
that
is
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are
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 really bothersome and disturb us .
On the other hand
,when we are going to do
school
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a school
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 run or go shopping and so on,we usually get stuck in heavy
treffic
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traffic
 due
transfering
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transferring
 of
airport's
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airport
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 passengers.Now ,I am sure you can imagine what will
happend
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happen
 after the
airport
expension
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explosion
. In my point of view,it will be more effective if you ask
locals
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ideas
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for ideas
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 about
this
 matter and write an article to compare
advantages
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the advantages
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 and
disadvatages
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disadvantages
 of
this
 decision. I hope you will consider my feedback
.l
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look forward to hearing from you . Many thanks for your attention and cooperation
to
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this
 subject . Yours
sincerly
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sincerely
 Sina
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Task Achievement
Make sure to address all points of the task adequately. Expand on the reasons why you do not want the airport development with clear and specific examples. This will strengthen the task achievement score.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices (e.g., firstly, secondly, in addition) to structure the argument logically. Avoid repetition of phrases to improve cohesion.
Task Achievement
The introduction and closing phrases are polite and appropriate, but ensure they are more formal and varied to enhance tone suitability.
Coherence & Cohesion
Separate ideas into distinct paragraphs - each paragraph should convey a single idea. Enhance readability by focusing on one point at a time.
Coherence & Cohesion
Check grammar and punctuation to ensure clarity. This includes correct use of commas, periods, and pronoun references.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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