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The plans below show a student room for two people and a student room for one person at an Australian university.

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The given floor plans
illustrates
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 the layout of 2 distinct student rooms designed for one person and for two people at a particular Australian university. In general, the
room
 intended for 2 occupants is not only more expensive but
also
 wider and more convenient than
than
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its single-person counterpart. Regarding the
room
 for a single student with dimensions of 6 meters in length and 2.5 meters in width, it costs about $200 per week. In the middle of the
room
, there
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 a study desk and a TV
while
 a bed is positioned adjacent to
windows
Correct article usage
the windows
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 on the right side. On the left-hand side, there is a bathroom at the front, and opposite of it
places
Verb problem
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 a kitchen with some necessary equipment. In comparison, the price of the two-person
room
 is 150$ higher than that of the prior.
Additionally
, its width is 4 metres, providing sufficient space for 2 individuals. Basically, at the front, there
are
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is
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 a bathroom, a set of study
desk
Fix the agreement mistake
desks
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 and a bed, mirroring the layout of the single-student
room
. The kitchen and a tv
Add a missing verb
are place
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place
Replace the word
placed
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 on the left-bottom corner
toaccommodate
Correct your spelling
to accommodate
additional furniture including a round table,
a
Correct word choice
and a
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bed
along with
 a desk. Notably, individual spaces are divided by a row of cupboards, ensuring privacy for each occupant.
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coherence cohesion
Make sure you have an introduction, at least two or three body paragraphs, and a conclusion for optimal structure.
coherence cohesion
Use cohesive devices and transition words to ensure smooth flow of ideas throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Expand on the main points with relevant examples and supporting details in each paragraph.
task achievement
Ensure you have fully addressed the task by accurately describing all elements shown in the plans.
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Clarify and elaborate on your ideas to provide a more detailed and comprehensive response.
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Include specific examples to effectively illustrate the differences and similarities between the two room layouts.

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