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The chart below shows the average household spending pattern for households in three income categories as a proportion of their income. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the average household spending pattern for households in three income categories as a proportion of their income. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the average household spending pattern of low, medium and
high
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income
 family as a percentage of their
income
.
Overall
, the major spending of the three categories is housing. The least spending group for
low
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low-income
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income
 is education and retirement savings. Medium
income
 spends least on education
whereas
 high
income
 has
least
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the least
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 spending on eating out. For
low
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low-income
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income
 category (earning between $15,000-$25,000), they spend almost 30% of their
income
 on housing
payment
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payments
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 and close to 20% of their
income
 on transport. These expenses make up
of
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nearly half of their
income
.
Same
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The same
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 goes
to
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for
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medium
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the medium
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income
 category (earning between $50,000 - $75,000), whereby close to 50% of their
income
 spending contributes to housing and transport
payment
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payments
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.
In contrast
,
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the high
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high
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high-income
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income
 category (earning above $150,000)
spend
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spends
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 the majority of their
income
 on housing
payment
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payments
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 (close to 30%) and over 15% of their
income
 is proportioned for their retirement savings.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • income category
  • household spending
  • low-income households
  • mid-income households
  • high-income households
  • spending pattern
  • expenditure
  • trend
  • notably
  • significantly
  • on average
  • predominantly
  • essential expenses
  • disposable income
  • allocate
  • budget
  • vary
  • contrast
  • percentage
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