The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The maps depict the current
plan
of the Islip town centre and its
plan
after the redevelopment.
Overall
, it's clear that
town
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the town
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centre is to be
brought-up-to
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brought up to
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date, with the construction of some modern facilities, a new
road
system and more housing. When it comes to the current
plan
, there is a main
road
running east-west through the town
center
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centre
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and there are
shops
near the main
road
.
This
road
has two side roads, one leading to the school
at
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on
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the southwest and
other
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the other
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heads
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heading
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to the park
which
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apply
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on the southeast.In the future
plan
, the main
road
is going to be turned into a ring
road
which is called
dual
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a dual
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carriageway covers new facilities and houses. All the
shops
on the north side going to be replaced by
bus
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a bus
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station, shopping centre,car park, and a new housing scheme
while
the main
road
is to be pedestrianized. To the south of the
map
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map,
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there are some
shops
and housing.The
shops
are to remain unchanged,
whereas
the housing is to be relocated.And
also
,
park
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the park
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and the school
are remained
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remain
have remained
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the same.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plan, road, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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