Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that schools is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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the parents and seniors. People are arguing
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children are learning
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schools and they are applying the whole thing to
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society
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. On the one hand, parents serve as role models for every child. When they are growing up in a family, most of the time every procreator wants to teach them, as they have learned before. They would learn from them the moral norms and how to make contact with others respectfully.
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to show
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good habits and truthfulness
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because they will emerge as a good human in
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parents and
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, for that reason sometimes people
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‘’like father like son’’.
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guardians can not consistently teach and monitor
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their kid’s behaviour patterns
due to
lack of time.
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, the educational sector
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them
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environment for learning the morality of
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. The
text books
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and teachers
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how to become a good human in
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they
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them how to make a good
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with others and they are teaching them multicultural activity. Because the schools
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a media for gathering different cultural
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in every class. From
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primary
school
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they are learning
this
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activity with them.
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government primary
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admitted
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a lot of students from different
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with them and they have learned and developed themselves. In conclusion,
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both
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would be effective for
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life
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.
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,
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parental teaching is an effective way of learning and
school
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are creating them more productive and accountable in
society
.
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  • Moral compass
  • Ethical paradigms
  • Cultural mores
  • Civic duties
  • Socialization
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Pedagogical approaches
  • Value systems
  • Cohesive society
  • Formative years
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