The best way to solve the world's environmental problem is to increase the price of fuels. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people are
in
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the view that increasing the price of fuels is the most effective way to solve the world's environmental issues. As much as the statement may be true,I firmly disagree with it as
this
may solve
one
trouble and bring on board thousands of troubles. In
this
essay
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I will give out reasons why I strongly oppose the idea.
To begin
with, raising the amount of purchasing
fuel
will in turn lead to a spike in prices of almost all items as goods need to be transported from
one
place to another. By
this
I mean, for an item to reach a consumer from a seller, means of transport need to be used
for example
vehicles which again require to be fueled and
thus
rise
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in the price of
petrolium
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petroleum
will make the seller alter the normal market-price of an item. As an example, if a shoe was being sold at three thousand shillings it
will
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now be purchased at a higher amount to
cover-up
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cover up
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the transportation cost. Second but not least,
Increment
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an Increment
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in
fuel
costs affects
one
's saving plan and budgeting. With regards
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this
, human beings have certain goals to achieve over a period of time and
this
makes them tend to look
up
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for ways to reach their dream by keeping aside some coins the moment they
recieve
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receive
a salary.
For instance
,
one
can decide to save a given percentage of the money earned but
unfortunately
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if they are required to add some amount
on
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what they used to pay for
fuel
then
this
will result in alterations in fund savings for it to be used for other purposes rather than initial motive.
To conclude
, for the reasons above I am in
a
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apply
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strong opposition that
rise
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a rise
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in
fuel
will be a solution to
environment
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environmental
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troubles. As a matter of
fact
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fact,
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it raises the cost of commodities and negatively affects an individual's budget.
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It's important to delve deeper into the question and address the environmental aspect of the topic, which is only briefly mentioned.
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Try to provide concrete examples and data to support your points. This will help strengthen your argument.
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Work on presenting a more balanced view by considering both sides of the argument, which could lead to higher scores in task response.
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coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking words to show the relationships between ideas more clearly.
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Try to expand on your conclusion by summarizing your main points and restating your opinion with a final thought.

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