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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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british
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 undergraduates who can communicate in different languages (french,
german
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German
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,
spanish
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Spanish
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, another, two
other
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others
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 and no other languages) at
same
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the same
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 university in England
in
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for
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period
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a period
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 of 10 years.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the largest proportion of
student
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students
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 can speak in
spanish
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Spanish
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language
 in the year
of
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apply
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2000,
whereas
 the least number of undergraduates were able to negotiate in German
as well as
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the jther
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jther
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other
their
the
 two
language
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languages
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, respectively.
To begin
 with, it is quite evident that the third quarter of students of England
university
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universities
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able
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are able
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 to
comuniate
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communicate
 in
spanish
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Spanish
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, but it
increasen fron
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increased from
 30% to 35% in 2010.
Similarly
 to
this
, there
were
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was
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also
increase
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an increase
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 in juniors who
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spoke
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 in foreign
language
fron
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from
 15.0% to 20.0%, respectively.
However
, by 2010, the proportion of
student
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students
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 who know only one
language
 had decreased to 10%, compared to
french
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French
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 and
german
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German
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 which accounted for 10% were same as each other.
Also
, there were 5% fewer French speakers in 2010.
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  • proportions
  • multilingual
  • linguistic competence
  • significant
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • popularity
  • relatively
  • decade
  • compare/contrast
  • survey
  • data
  • fluent
  • proficient
  • bilingual
  • predominant
  • minority
  • emerge
  • dwindle
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