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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie chart illustrates the
british
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British
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 undergraduates who can communicate in different languages (french,
german
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German
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,
spanish
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Spanish
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, another, two
other
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others
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 and no other languages) at
same
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the same
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 university in England
in
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for
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period
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a period
the period
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 of 10 years.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the largest proportion of
student
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students
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 can speak in
spanish
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Spanish
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language
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 in the year
of
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apply
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2000,
whereas
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 the least number of undergraduates were able to negotiate in German
as well as
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the jther
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jther
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other
their
the
 two
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language
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languages
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, respectively.
To begin
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 with, it is quite evident that the third quarter of students of England
university
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universities
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able
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are able
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 to
comuniate
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communicate
 in
spanish
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Spanish
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, but it
increasen fron
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increased from
 30% to 35% in 2010.
Similarly
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 to
this
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, there
were
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was
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also
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increase
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an increase
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 in juniors who
convey
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spoke
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 in foreign
language
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fron
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from
 15.0% to 20.0%, respectively.
However
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, by 2010, the proportion of
student
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students
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 who know only one
language
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 had decreased to 10%, compared to
french
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French
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 and
german
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German
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 which accounted for 10% were same as each other.
Also
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, there were 5% fewer French speakers in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • multilingual
  • linguistic competence
  • significant
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • popularity
  • relatively
  • decade
  • compare/contrast
  • survey
  • data
  • fluent
  • proficient
  • bilingual
  • predominant
  • minority
  • emerge
  • dwindle
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