The maps below show the center of a small town called Lslip as it is now, and plans for its development.

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The map demonstrates expected renovations in a Lslip.

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, the most noticeable

changing

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is the fact that

dual

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carriageway, that

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around

city

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, is planned to be created.

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, two more housing is going to

be build

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. It is noticeable that

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some facilities remained unchanged or with small

difference

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. First of all,

school

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is planned to stay at the same location.

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the park

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park

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and two housings would not be relocated,

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however

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some partition of

parks

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the parks

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territory is going to be executed for building

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new housing.

Main

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road is planned to be replaced by

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a pedestrians'

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pedestrians'

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friendly area. Nowadays, two shop rows

located

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on both sides of a main road.

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north

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side of

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city is expected to be reconstructed and

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totally new infrastructure is going to be created. In a map of

Lslip

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the Lslip

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center

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centre

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development is seen that

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a bus

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station, shopping

center

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and car park would be built.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

town center
landmark
residential area
commercial district
infrastructure
urban planning
development proposal
rejuvenation
green space
sustainability
traffic congestion
property values
pedestrian
preservation
modernization

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The maps below show the center of a small town called Lslip as it is now, and plans for its development.

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