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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Norbiton industrial
area
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 consists of a main
plaza
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,
and
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a
road
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 going east to a
road
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 of factories and a
road
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 going south that connects to the main
road
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 that goes to town. North
from
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 the main
area
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, there's
a
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farmland across a river. The planned future development of Norbiton gives some significant changes to the
area
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. Where there
initially
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was
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 just two roads from the
plaza
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, now there are two more roads, one going to a residential
area
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 northwest
from
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 the
plaza
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, and a
road
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 going to the farmland north, with a bridge over the river. Across the river, there's now
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 some residential housing aside from the initial farmland. The main
plaza
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that
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initially
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surrounded by factories now
have
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 some shops and a medical centre to facilitate access for the residents. The
road
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 east of the
plaza
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 that
initially
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 leads to some factories now hosts some education buildings, with a school at the very end of the
road
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, and a playground north of it. Three residential housings are
also
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 there
in
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 the main eastern
road
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, initially".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, plaza, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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