IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
In a world where technology is starting to take over the media industry and the rise of the internet,
such
 printed items are slowly being replaced by a single device that provides everything we need to obtain information. With the ongoing debate whether people will abandon physical items with digitized versions of it, newspapers and books will no longer be relevant to them because they
could
Wrong verb form
can
show examples
 access
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
show examples
 anytime for free.
Although
 I agree to
an
Correct article usage
the
show examples
 extent that we are slowly reducing the amount of damage to the environment
in
Change preposition
by
show examples
 printing them, I believe that the creators should be credited more for their work by funding them. On
one
 hand, it is a good idea to stop consuming printed media, for it will help us in saving the environment.
Additionally
, it is more convenient to have everything in
one
 item and access it anytime in order to catch up
with
Change preposition
at
show examples
 their own pace.
Thus
, replacing them
into
Change preposition
with
show examples
one
 device would be a sustainable move for everyone to save the environment and make it more convenient for anyone. Even though it is a good idea that everyone has the accessibility to
obtain
Verb problem
apply
show examples
free news and literature online, it is rather unfair to the authors. Their work should be paid
instead
 of publishing it online for free because
that is
one
 of their sources of income.
Therefore
, some works should be purchased before they
read
Add a missing verb
are read
show examples
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
even if it is online.
To conclude
, though I agree to an extent that online media is a new platform for the future of newspapers and books, I believe that the creators should be paid as well
instead
 of letting their works be read for free.
Submitted by anindyadewi58 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion on the statement in the introduction and conclusion for task achievement.
Task Achievement
Develop your arguments further with more specific examples to support your points.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each main body paragraph has a clear central idea and is fully elaborated on.
Coherence & Cohesion
Avoid making general statements; be precise and offer clear explanations or arguments.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
What to do next:
Look at other essays: