The Chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed men and women of different employment status. Write at least 150 words.

The Chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed men and women of different employment status. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph depicts information about the proportion of free
time
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between males and females from 1998 to 1999, broken down into five different employment conditions. The figures are measured in
hours
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that there is a similar amount of leisure
time
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spent by the two sexes which are in retirement and out of work.
Moreover
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, it is
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interesting to note that more males than females, in all types of occupational status, spend their free
time
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generally.
In terms
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retired people and those who are out of work have the highest proportion of enjoying their free
time
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, achieving 80
hours
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for men which
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slightly different from women who spent approximately 75
hours
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.
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, men who had full-
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employment enjoyed their leisure
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for 50
hours
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compared with women were spent more than a third for about 38
hours
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. The other categories, employed part-
time
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and housewives, had a medium proportion of spending leisure
time
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for 45
hours
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on average.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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