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Language teachers should concentrate on giving positive feedback to students when they do good work, rather than on criticising bad work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#language #teachers #feedback #students #work
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 language teachers only concentrate
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 positive feedback for good
work
 to
students
 rather than criticising the bad
work
 for the reason
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 building
students
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knowledgement
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knowledge
 even to advance
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language
skill
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, criticising
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bad
work
 is another level for language teachers to
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 if
students
 have finished in wrong way. If
students
 always have positive feedback without knowing the wrong result of their
work
, the
students
 will never know the mistake
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 what they've done. Criticising can't be assumed to make the
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 level, but it supports their
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 must be better in future. They must understand which is the good
work
 and the bad
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 reason they improve their skill.
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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your essay with a clearer structure; it should include an introduction with a paraphrased question and your thesis statement, at least two body paragraphs with main points supported by examples or explanations, and a conclusion that summarizes your view without introducing new information.
introduction conclusion present
Ensure your introduction clearly presents the topic and your position on the statement given, and provide a conclusion that echoes this position and summarises the arguments made in the body paragraphs.
supported main points
Support your main points with specific examples or explanations, which can make your argument stronger and more convincing. You can draw from personal experiences, hypothetical situations, or known facts.
complete response
Respond to all parts of the task. You have begun to address the prompt by disagreeing with the statement, but be sure to explore both the importance of positive feedback and the role of criticism in learning with more depth and balance. This will showcase your ability to engage critically with the question.
clear comprehensive ideas
Clarify your ideas for the reader by developing them more thoroughly. When you present a viewpoint, explain why you hold this view, and how it relates to the statement or question, preferably in separate paragraphs for each point.
relevant specific examples
Include relevant and specific examples to back up your claims. These examples help illustrate your points and provide a concrete basis for your arguments. If you discuss the role of criticism in learning, give a clear instance of how it can be beneficial.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentrate on
  • positive feedback
  • good work
  • criticising
  • bad work
  • motivate
  • boost confidence
  • discourage
  • demotivate
  • identify strengths
  • build on
  • overwhelming
  • hinder
  • progress
  • balance
  • effective teaching
  • encourage
  • take risks
  • think creatively
  • fear of failure
  • hesitation
  • positive learning environment
  • demoralize
  • negative atmosphere
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