The growth of consumerism has led to a ‘throw-away’ culture where people are more concerned with acquiring material possessions than protecting the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is often argued that the government should
strict
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have strict
the
policies about Correct article usage
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the
wasteful consumption that leads to Correct article usage
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the
environmental Correct article usage
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disaster
. I strongly agree that Fix the agreement mistake
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people
aren’t concern
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concerned
the
excessive consumption and its impact to ruin the establishment.
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contributing
to waste and Wrong verb form
contributes
increase
disposal of still-functional goods. Wrong verb form
increased
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will be a major obstacle for environmental consequences because most of
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people
not
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do not
long term
growth of Add a hyphen
long-term
earth
. Examine the impact of overconsumption, ensuring that will give so Add an article
the earth
many
negativity to Correct quantifier usage
much
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such
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exhaustion of natural resources, pollution and waste management Correct your spelling
the
challenge
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challenges
For example
, people
can decrease the usage of any instant materials, but choose the material with bestest
durability. That’s why the government should adequately give Correct word choice
the best
a wise information
regarding the Remove the article
wise information
a piece of wise information
zero waste act
and study the motivation behind their consumerism.
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Zero Waste Act
other
hand, ‘throw-away’ culture has been a Correct article usage
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debateable
topic because it might present Correct your spelling
debatable
significant
change to environmental conservation. Add an article
a significant
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will propose Correct article usage
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a worse economic drives
because Correct the article-noun agreement
a worse economic drive
worse economic drives
people
most
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are more
being
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a
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consumer
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consumers
producer
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producers
Moreover
, less
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a less
substainable
consumption lifestyle will lead to many big Correct your spelling
sustainable
problem
in the future. Change to a plural noun
problems
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, in
the making of regulations and policies on reducing wasteful products should not be neglected.
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To conclude
, I agree that people
need to be educated through information and awareness in changing their habits and attitudes towards Correct article usage
an indescretion
indescretion
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indiscretion
life style
. I think Correct your spelling
lifestyle
government
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the government
acts
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plays
on
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in
this
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planning
manufacture
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manufacturing
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that perpetuates
perpetuates
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perpetuate
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