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The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of passengers at the London Underground Station.
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, the station experienced a significant
fluctution
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 with an hour duration between 6am
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 10pm. As the graph shows, the busiest time
of
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 visitors is 07.00 and 18.00, which is 400 and over 350 people respectively.
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, the crowd rarely trip by train at 6am and 4pm accounted for 100 people
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 both times. In the beginning, the number of passengers stood at a hundred folk in the early morning, at 6 o'clock,
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 reached a peak of 400 visitors at 08.00.
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, it declined steadily until it fell to 200 users at 10.00.
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, it slightly increases in the afternoon and reaches the lowest point at 4pm.
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 figure climbed sharply at 18.00 and decreased at 20.00.
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, the visitors ended up approximately
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150 people at night.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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