The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The four pie charts depict information about
sources
of generated electricity
in two different countries in 2009, broken down into two categories which are all types and renewables. Units are measured in percentage
.
Overall
, it is noticeable that both countries, Germany
and France
, have different proportion
of Fix the agreement mistake
proportions
sources
for generating electricity
. Moreover
, it is also
interesting to note that Germany
is more likely to use traditional thermal as the biggest source that come
from all types, Change the verb form
comes
while
France
tends to choose hydroelectric coming from renewable energy as the main source.
In Germany
, conventional thermal which accounted for more than half at 59.6% had the highest percentage
for generating electricity
, while
the amount of electricity
from this
Correct determiner usage
these
sources
had the lowest point at just 10.3% in France
. In contrast
, nuclear sources
had less than a quarter (23%) in Germany
, whereas
in France
most electricity
generation was nuclear with the
Correct article usage
a
percentage
more
than three quarters (76%).
Change preposition
of more
Furthermore
, in terms of renewable sources
in Germany
, biomass and wind power nearly have the same percentage
with more that
a third. In comparison with Correct word choice
than
Germany
, these sources
only have a low proportion at just 8.1% and 10.5% respectively in France
, and the highest value was hydroelectric sources
at 80.5%.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, electricity, percentage, germany, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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