With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes. To what extent do you agree with this view?

There is an ongoing debate
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the
beneficiense
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beneficence
of
space
exploration
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and whether the
money
could have been spent
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on
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more essential matters. My
prespective
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perspective
is,
although
space
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the space
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industry played an integral role in
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remarkable
improvment
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improvement
, the huge budget dedicated to
this
issue can be
suitabely
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suitably
used in other
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criteria
.
To begin
with, there are other
exteremly
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extremely
important matters in which
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money
can be beneficial.
First,
the
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healthcare organizations are facing
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a shortage
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of
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labour
and
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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. With the use of
money
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money,
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these
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challenges
can be resolved and the masses can experience
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better health
condition
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conditions
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.
Moreover
, education can become
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considerably
more achievable and sustainable with the help of the budget.
For example
, statistics illustrate that in Tehran a vast number of crowds are deprived
frome
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from
a qualified
toturing
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tutoring
torturing
system, which can be solved with budgetary allocation to it rather than spending
money
on
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aircraft
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.
However
,
this
matter can be
acheaveble
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achievable
with a
focoused
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focused
supervision to prevent misusing any facilities.
Secondly
,
space
explorations are more
dengorouse
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dangerous
than expected.
Eventhough
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Even though
space
fundings
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funding
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revealed too
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much
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information for human beings, it caused huge pollution in
the
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space
. If
space
industries
continiue
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continue
to
expaned
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expand
expanded
, there will be massive
colision
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collisions
between satelites and
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amount of
debries
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debris
will fall
into
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earth
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.
This
matter will lead to
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the vast
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amount of
debries
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debris
in
outer
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an outer
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atmospheric layer which
threats
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all lives on earth.
Therefore
, the expansion of
space
explorations should be limited which will
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result in less
money
consumption. In conclusion, my point of view is, since there are more societal benefits in spending
money
on
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healthcare and education,
also
for the
challengose
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challenge
challenges
space
debries
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debris
can cause, the budgetary priorities must be
re-esceduled
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re-scheduled
and be less spent on
space
industries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • resource acquisition
  • inspire
  • funding allocations
  • global challenges
  • poverty alleviation
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • educational reform
  • long-term investments
  • economic growth
  • sustainable development
  • societal benefits
  • budgetary priorities
  • space industry
  • fiscal responsibility
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