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The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.

The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.
#library #years #summarise #information
The central library plans clearly illustrate the significant changes
during
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 20 years.
Overall
,
this
 interior
renovations
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renovation
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 contains
replacement
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the replacement
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of the
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the rooms functions
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the functions of the room
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as well as
 some
constructural
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structural
nonstructural
 remodels and newly
use
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used
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 places. First and foremost, entering the building, the tables and chairs have already
removed
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been removed
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 and
moreover
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moreover,
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 nothing has replaced them. On the right side of
entrance
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the entrance
an entrance
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 area, there
were
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was
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the
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a
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room
 for
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the Equiry
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Equiry
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Enquiry
 desk which completely has
restructured
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in
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its shape
having
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a new usage.
likewise
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likewise,
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 the part in which children's books were kept has been
remodeled
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remodelled
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 as the lecture
room
.
Despit
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Despite
 those changes on the right side, between
northern
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the northern
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 and southern
room
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rooms
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thers
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there
 is only
the
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apply
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one space where not
olny
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only
 have been remained the same but
also
 some furnitures have added to the area. Turning to
left
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, there are
variouse
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various
 replanning
such
 as resizing the old IT
room
 and turn it to a multi-functional place.
Reading
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The reading
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room
,
in addition
, has been reorganized slightly and plays the role of
computer
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a computer
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room
 nowadays.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolve
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • amenities
  • state-of-the-art
  • landscape
  • pedestrian
  • augment
  • spatial
  • demolish
  • construct
  • accessibility
  • innovations
  • extensions
  • facade
  • environmental-friendly
  • urban development
  • public facility
  • modernize
  • technology integration
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