Mrs Barret, an English-speaking woman who lives in your hometown, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barret. In your letter -Suggest how you could help her in her home -Say why you would like to do this work -Explain when you will and will not be available
Dear Mrs Barret,
I am writing to express my interest in assisting you with the household as advertised.
I think I can help you with some of the
households
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household
such
as cooking and gardening.I know it might sound cliche, however
, I am studying culinary arts and regularly helping my mom at home. If needed, I can also
help you with cleaning,which is my favorite
.Regarding that, I guess I can assist you well.
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To begin
with, I am a college student who is trying to save some pocket money and improve my English level during the summer holidays.I will be very glad to help you this
summer to gain some English communication skills with you and at the same time earn some money. Luckily, we are living in the same neighbourhood so I can easily commute to your place.
Additionally
, I would like to express to you my schedule during the summer period. Unfortunately, I can not help you every day since I am also
helping the local shelter on Mondays and Thursdays. Besides
that, I am free to assist you on weekdays between 9.00 AM to 5.00 PM depending on your need.
Kind Regards,
Alice GrockawzSubmitted by ozcelik on
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Coherence & Cohesion
To enhance the logical structure, try organizing your thoughts more clearly before writing. Create an outline to ensure that each paragraph smoothly transitions into the next, maintaining a clear thread of discussion from the introduction to the conclusion.
Coherence & Cohesion
Improve your greeting and closing by using more varied and sophisticated language that aligns with the tone of the letter. Consider personalizing your opening and closing remarks to make a stronger, more memorable impression.
Coherence & Cohesion
Maintain a single idea per paragraph but develop each idea more fully. Expand on how your skills and experiences specifically match Mrs. Barrett's needs, and provide more detailed explanations to bring your points to life.
Task Achievement
To completely respond to the task, ensure that all prompts are addressed fully. Expound on why you want the job, perhaps by mentioning any personal aspirations or how it aligns with your future goals, not just the monetary benefit and language practice.
Task Achievement
The writing tone is appropriate, but to make it more suitable, include formal language and phrases that are commonly found in job application letters. Avoid overly casual expressions and maintain a professional yet friendly tone throughout.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite