The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates the number of weekly earnings by full-time graduate employees during 2002
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are separated
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two categories
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age
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and
degree
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. The first key feature is that employees with a first
degree
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earn less, starting at 350
pounds
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for those aged 21-25. As the
age
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groups get older, the pay increases, reaching nearly 700
pounds
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for people between 36 and 45 years old, before dropping slightly in the 46-50
age
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group.
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, those with a higher
degree
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or other qualifications. Their income shows a sharp increase from
age
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21 up to
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40
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respectively
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, the
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weekly earnings for
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group reached a peak of 820
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.
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it demonstrated a downward trend for the ages between 41 and 60, the amount of money being earned decreased
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around 690
pounds
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.
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, with the exception of other qualifications, the graph has shown a
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increase in the weekly earnings for the first and higher
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degree
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, degree, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion of expenditure
  • Revenue
  • Categories
  • Significant changes
  • Spending habits
  • Relatively stable
  • Inflation
  • Lifestyle
  • Investments
  • Academic materials
  • Entertainment
  • Accommodation
  • Utilities
  • Food
  • Transportation
  • Miscellaneous expenses
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